I chose my final draft of our first essays, about the power of metaphors. Instead of underlining, I highlighted whenever there was repetition, transition words, or key terms/phrases. Already looking back on that first essay I feel like my writing skill has improved.
A few patterns were definitely the repetition of key phrases and ideas in every single paragraph. I used a good amount of pointing terms as well, when referring to metaphors, or something from an article that I was quoting. Again, I definitely tend to rely on the repetition of key phrases. I think I do that in order to remind the reader and myself of what my thesis or argument is. I do think this is a good tactic, but I think it could benefit from some rewording. I think a few of my topic sentences could benefit from rewording, and transition words. I know that my entire essay could use more transitions to connect each topic. That is something I am definitely going to keep in mind while finishing up this next final draft for the newest essay prompt. I think I jump around a bit, especially a lot in the conclusion paragraph. Reading this chapter really helped me with recognizing things to work on in the future.
